Every Student Need to Go to University?
In my opinion, Korea’s trend about going
university is strange.
-World’s trend about going to university
-Korea’s trend about going to university
-Why Korea’s students are going university
-Korea’s trend about going to university
need to be changed
Hello Dugi,
답글삭제You have very special format on your first draft. It seems like outline, but I could understand your issue and opinion. I also agree with your statement that it is not necessary to go to university. However, I think if someone do not go to university, he or she probably needs more challenge and the processing to get success is followed by many difficulties in Korea. Thus, I have interesting specially in about world’s trend about going to university. I hope I could read it with good outside sources and specific and clear sentences in your final draft.
Have a nice day,
Jiyon
Hello Du Gi,
답글삭제I really like your topic. Almost every highschool students have thought about it, and I did so too!! What you have done is outline of your final draft. I think you should make sure what your opinion is. Is your opinion not all of student should go to university or Korea's trend about going to university need to be changed? You better clear your idea and add some more details to support your idea. Maybe 'OREO' which Gary told to us would help you.
Have a nice day.
Bora Seo.
Hi Dugi,
답글삭제I think your issue really good to write your opinion , but why you didn't write paragraph? It seems to be good if you fix your outline and add some specific out sources. What is world's trend about going to university? What is Korea's trend? Why Korea's students are going university? Critically, what 'strange' means in your opinion ? Your outline is too abstract.
Have a nice day,
Sarah.
Hi dugi,
답글삭제Your topic is really interesting. I also thought about that issue, and it's a strange trend of going to college only in South Korea indeed. While other countries are generous about going to college, South Korea is very strict about it. I cannot get it well why this happens. If you write more specific, I could catch what the source of the problem is, and it will help not only me to widen knowledge but other readers.
Best wishes,
Hyewon Shin
Hello Dugi,
답글삭제Your issue is interesting, and it is important for me too. I still agonize about college diploma now, and getting a job is becoming more difficult although students have college diploma, qualification, and so many experience. Also I think that there is more important than the college diploma. Those are personality, creativity, and relationship. This is what I want to say: your issue is interesting, but you have to write carefully and need many reasons, data, tendency of society, and so on. I hope that you write a nice paragraph until final draft.
Have a nice day,
Younghwi