2015년 9월 26일 토요일

My ideal concentration place 1st draft(revised)

Blog Post #2
Song DuKi
EW2-060
121917

C.A.T(concentrate and time)
My ideal place concentrated on my works has three features which are fresh air, mood like café and infinite time. First, fresh air is very important to me. I hate stuffy feeling, for example some place, that crowded with people in small place, have hazy air. In that kind of place, my brain is muddled from the effects of the high rate of carbon dioxide. Also type of fresh air is also important to me. I like rainy air, smoky air and phytoncide scent. This kind of air makes me fresh!! Second, Mood, like café, is very comprehensive term, but I restricted it café. Café has various mood’s element. For example, café’s proper light makes mood which is not much bright and dark. Café’s music is very important element to makes people’s mood kind of gentle sound, white noise and something. Cafe’s interior make people’s mind loose. So my ideal place to concentrate look like café. Last, time is very significant to everyone also me. Whenever I study or do something that I need to concentrate, I need more time and wish much time. So my ideal place has slower time room. In slower time room, I can control time pass speed. This equipment make me not to hurry about finishing something, in the end my works quality is better. Let’s imagine my ideal place. My ideal place is located in forest near by stream. It is cabin not that big but not that small. That cabin made of whole glass with every side, and I can control glass’s brightness. In that cabin there is customized table and chair. Next to the table, there is state of the arts audio equipment. On the table, there is controller which is control all of my cabin. I just need thing that I mentioned because many thing makes me distract








Forest and stream
http://kr.best-wallpaper.net/Grand-Teton-National-Park-mountains-forest-trees-creek_2560x1600.html

Time and Mind room in DragonBall Animation
http://voidlog.tistory.com/21


댓글 6개:

  1. Dear duki,
    I exactly know 4 characteristics of the place you seek to concentrate, but it is hard that I associate clear image of the place. To be more impressive paragraph, it is likely to need visual descriptions, detailed explanations, and specific format. I'm looking forward to seeing your better paragraph.
    Thanks,
    Yeonwoo

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  2. Hi Du-Ki,
    I agree with your opinion. I think the light is important thing to focus on my work or study too. Because when i study, dark room makes me doze off. On the other hands, bright room makes me dazzled. Thus, I think it is important to set the light properly.

    Have a nice day,

    Eunju

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  3. Hi Duki,

    I like how you came up with 4 different factors about your ideal place. I strongly agree with your second and third point. I also think that ligth (haven't heard of this word though) place with fresh air provides a comfortable environment for me as well. Just to give you some comments, providing more detailed explanation about your point and adding a picture can help the readers to sympathize about your point. I guess you were busy to edit your paragraph during chuseok vacation :) Have a great day!

    Thanks,
    HoJung

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  4. Hi Duki,
    I'm glad to read your paragraph. I also agree your opinion. Four elements are effective to concentrate. I think you should add your supporting sentences. If you add picture in your paragraph, I can understand your ideal place very well.
    Thanks,
    Dongsik Kim.

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  5. Dear Duki,

    It is interesting that your ideal place stands out clearly. I like quiet place, but you don’t. The others are same with me. You wrote paragraph simple because it is 1st draft, I guess. I believe that you add your supporting sentences before submitting the final draft.

    Thank you,
    Moon Ji-yeon

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  6. Dear Duki,

    Hi, Duki. I am so happy to find someone who have the same feeling about the ideal place to work on something. It was easy for me to understand what you will be writing about later with the topic. Usually I find it difficult to start writing what I want to write because it can be quite unorganised if I don't plan well. So I think I might try to state the points even If it is simple as you did above. Thanks. I am looking forward to reading your final draft. Hope you had a good time over the holiday.

    Best,
    Sinae

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